6. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
How much difference can conciseness make?
In what ways does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
7. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
How much difference can conciseness make?
In what ways does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
8. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
How much difference can conciseness make?
In what ways does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
WORKSHOP
9. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
What does conciseness mean (and not mean)?
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
How much difference can conciseness make?
In what ways does conciseness help me sell?
How can I write more concisely?
WORKSHOP
Three-minute video
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“The number-one complaint I’ve heard
from technical publications managers is,
‘Much of my staff is about to retire, and
I’m having trouble finding anyone who
can write correct grammar and simple,
concise, accurate text.’”
!
—Maxwell Hoffmann
Intercom magazine,
Society forTechnical Communication, Jan. 2013
50. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
Audience needs:
“What’s in it for me?”
Write Tight(er):
ATime-Saving, Pain-Free
Technique for SellingYourself,
Your Company, orYour
Products throughYour Words
51. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
Audience needs:
“What’s in it for me?”
My purpose:
Get you here
Write Tight(er):
ATime-Saving, Pain-Free
Technique for SellingYourself,
Your Company, orYour
Products throughYour Words
52. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
No more
Audience needs:
“What’s in it for me?”
My purpose:
Get you here
Write Tight(er):
ATime-Saving, Pain-Free
Technique for SellingYourself,
Your Company, orYour
Products throughYour Words
53. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
No more No less
Audience needs:
“What’s in it for me?”
My purpose:
Get you here
Write Tight(er):
ATime-Saving, Pain-Free
Technique for SellingYourself,
Your Company, orYour
Products throughYour Words
60. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
How much difference can
conciseness make?
“Measured usability was
dramatically higher for the
concise version [of the
website]—58% better.”
!
Nielsen Norman Group
www.nngroup.com/articles/
how-users-read-on-the-web
73. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“But I already write concisely.”
This is your
toothbrush
when it’s
new.The
blue bristles
are blue all
the way to
their tips.
This is your
toothbrush
when it’s
ready to
replace.The
blue bristles
have turned
half white.
74. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“But I already write concisely.”
This is your
toothbrush
when it’s
new.The
blue bristles
are blue all
the way to
their tips.
This is your
toothbrush
when it’s
ready to
replace.The
blue bristles
have turned
half white.
Visual-verbal
redundancy
90. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
1 sentence, 1 language
91. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
1 sentence, 1 language
92. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
93. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
94. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
95. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 25 languages
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
96. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
$ 62,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 25 languages
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
97. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
You may be needing a loan.
How much can a word cost?
Translation cost (or savings):
$ 0.25
* the size of a Harry Potter novel
$ 2,500.00
$ 62,500.00
You may need a loan.
words6
5 words
1 word
10,000 sentences,* 25 languages
10,000 sentences,* 1 language
1 sentence, 1 language
105. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database)
unrecognized word
“fuzzy” match Full price
106. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database)
unrecognized word
“fuzzy” match Full price
Pay less
107. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database)
unrecognized word
“fuzzy” match
“perfect” match
Full price
Pay less
108. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
a word? How so?
Close enough
Varies with the language
Depends on the translation memory (database)
unrecognized word
“fuzzy” match
“perfect” match
You still pay!
Full price
Pay less
117. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
118. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
119. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
120. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
121. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
122. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
123. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
124. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
125. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
126. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
127. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
128. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
verbiage
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
129. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
verbiage
any other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
130. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
verbiage
any other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
131. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
verbiage
any other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
132. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
verbiage
any other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
Time-saving,
pain-free
technique
168. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“There are known knowns.These are things
we know that we know.There are known
unknowns.That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are
also unknown unknowns.There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”
(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
169. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“There are known knowns.These are things
we know that we know.There are known
unknowns.That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are
also unknown unknowns.There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”
(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
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“There are known knowns.These are things
we know that we know.There are known
unknowns.That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are
also unknown unknowns.There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”
(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
We don’t know diddly—
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“There are known knowns.These are things
we know that we know.There are known
unknowns.That is to say, there are things
that we know we don’t know. But there are
also unknown unknowns.There are things
we don’t know we don’t know.”
(attributed to a one-time US secretary of defense)
We don’t know diddly—
except to avoid be-verbs.
186. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnstonHowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
199. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
200. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
not, no (& other negative words)
203. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
If you want viewers to focus on something,
do not show faces looking away from it.
(This image is from an eye-tracking study by James Breeze
as cited in Garr Reynolds’s book Presentation Zen.)
204. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
If you want viewers to focus on something,
do not show faces looking away from it.
(This image is from an eye-tracking study by James Breeze
as cited in Garr Reynolds’s book Presentation Zen.)
209. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
the fact that
213. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
just
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
219. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
Michael Noer handed the six-year-old the
tablet.With no instruction, and never having
seen a computer, the boy began to swipe the
screen, launch apps, and play a pinball game.
220. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
Michael Noer handed the six-year-old the
tablet.With no instruction, and never having
seen a computer, the boy began to swipe the
screen, launch apps, and play a pinball game.
227. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“When our tools don’t work, we tend to
blame ourselves for being too stupid or not
reading the manual or having too fat fingers.”
—Lev Grossman, Time
228. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“When our tools don’t work, we tend to
blame ourselves for being too stupid or not
reading the manual or having too fat fingers.”
—Lev Grossman, Time
231. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
period of time
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
241. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
In light of my lack of cash,
we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel
attended his niece’s graduation.
I prefer thatTV in terms of cost.
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In light of my lack of cash,
we stopped at an ATM.
In spite of his poor health, Samuel
attended his niece’s graduation.
I prefer thatTV in terms of cost.
243. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“The word of is, in anything other
than small doses, among the surest
indications of flabby writing.”
—Bryan Garner
Garner’s Modern American Usage
244. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
“The word of is, in anything other
than small doses, among the surest
indications of flabby writing.”
—Bryan Garner
Garner’s Modern American Usage
245. #spectrum14 WriteTight(er) HowToWriteEverything.com @MarciaRJohnston
weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
proverbial
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
different (as in many different, 36 different)
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
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*unless you need them
particular
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While Lady Gaga’s
particular sense of
style puzzles many,
millions of fans say
that her affirming
theme of bravery
and kindness has
changed their lives.
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While Lady Gaga’s
particular sense of
style puzzles many,
millions of fans say
that her affirming
theme of bravery
and kindness has
changed their lives.
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
verbiage
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weak be-verbs (is, was, were, will be, have been, am, are)
-ly words (& other vapid adverbs)
very, such, so (& other empty intensifiers)
not, no (& other negative words)
the fact that
just
begin to, try to, tend to, in order to
period of time
in light of, in spite of, in terms of (& of in general)
proverbial
different (as in many different, 36 different)
particular
verbiage
any other verbiage or unneeded words that you can pitch
Dump these words!*
*unless you need them
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Word
count
Cost to
translate into
1 language 25 languages
x 10,000
sentences
(Harry Potter
novel)
BEFORE Your original text here with
more words than you need. 10 $2.50 $62.50 $625,000.00
AFTER Your tighter text here. 4 $1.00 $25.00 $250,000.00
Savings 60% $1.50 $37.50 $375,000.00
Spreadsheet available on request.
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
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Hey, Rick, would you bring me a glass of room-temperature water?
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